I weaved a blissful
Dream, it shattered, shattering
My heart full of hope
Tired hope heaved a sigh
Of frustration, despair gripped
The expectation
Fire may stop blazing
Embers remain, stubborn hope
Rises like phoenix
Written for: Sensational Haiku
Hope springs eternal in the human breast...
ReplyDeleteWell crafted!
http://writer-in-transit.co.za/haiku-10-fire/
i see this as a metaphor for falling in love, we fall in love, out of love, get hurt, never want to fall in love again, and then we do again
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O boy!!!Love.Totally overrated...;-P Nice poem btw...:-)
ReplyDeletelike 'hope' rising like the phoenix ~ thanks, namaste, ^_^
ReplyDeleteI feel the hope and longing! Great write! I really want to learn how to do Haiku's ! This is amazing...
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WHwre there is hope, there is fire!
ReplyDeleteHope does have a habit of rising up, phoenix-like, when we least expect it.
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@ Michelle: Glad you liked it. Thanks!:)
ReplyDelete@ Zongrik: You're right about word verification but I think there's no word verication on my blog. Thanks!:)
@ Rahul: I'm glad you liked my poem. Thank you! But here, I'm not talking about love (Love was nowhere in my mind while writing this poem. I wonder why it seems love poem) I'm talking about dreams and hope. We often weave many dreams (Dreams are not always about love) in our life and want them to get fulfilled and when they shatter, we do get disheartened. That's it. Thanks!:)
@ Carol: Thank you! Namaste:)
ReplyDelete@ Mr. Watson: Thank you so much!
Haiku has three (Complete)meaningful lines having strict 5-7-5 or 3-5-3 syllables format (For example haiku has two syllables). It’s interesting and I hope you’ll learn to write nice haiku:) Thanks!
@ Karen: Well said. Thanks!:)
@ MMT: You're right. Thank you!:)
Nice one , Tarang:)
ReplyDeleteThank you!:)
ReplyDeleteHope is sometimes the only thing we are left with in life. Beauitful poetry...
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ReplyDelete@ Me: Yes, sometimes...Glad you liked this poem. Thank you!:)
ReplyDelete@ Rahul: Thank you very much for this award! So nice of you:)
Very powerful haiku Tarang!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Valli!:)
ReplyDeletei like the last one the best
ReplyDeletewhen time races like a bullet
Thank you Zongrik!:)
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