really enjoyed the time slipping piece: it doesn't matter how much one convinces oneself it isn't a big deal, there is always that nagging old "time slipping" eating away.
I find both of these chilling really. I seem to get a different message from them than some of the other readers. I read the words of desperation rather than hope. Nice writing, and thanks for participating in Poets United!
@ Mary: Desperation is somehow common for a confused soul, trapped in an eddy of uncertainty, as it desperately yearns to come out of that phase...Thank you!:)
@ Laura: Maybe you're right. One has to put effort to get out of this situation. But words of assurance bring some solace to some extent :)
@ Judy Roney: Glad you felt what I tried to portray. Thanks!:)
We long for those words. Nice one.
ReplyDeleteThanks!:)
ReplyDeleteGreat interpretaion of the prompt. Trapped by our own uncertainty - perhaps no one can rescue us from what we have created on our own?
ReplyDeleteThose are the words we can all agree on! Nicely written.
ReplyDeleteUncertainty can be like an uncontrolled whirl within a prison!
ReplyDeleteWe have all been there.....awaiting those comforting words...
ReplyDeleteI like this. It tells a story. Maybe a new Dr Who episode outlined in haiku?
ReplyDelete@ Judith Westerfield: Maybe you're right! Thank you!:)
ReplyDelete@ ND Mitchell: Thank you!:)
@ Gemma Wiseman: Well said!:)
@ Joanne: :)
@ Alicekeysmd: I don't know about "Dr Who" but it can be a story of many confused souls. Glad you liked it. Thanks!:)
really enjoyed the time slipping piece: it doesn't matter how much one convinces oneself it isn't a big deal, there is always that nagging old "time slipping" eating away.
ReplyDeleteSometimes only words are that we need to rescue a soul from a state of wretchedness. Lovely haiku!
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This is what we need at times !!!
ReplyDeleteEvery confused soul seeks for such a help! Beautiful set Tarang! :)
ReplyDelete@ Thecheesewolf: Thanks!:)
ReplyDelete@ Meenakshi: You're right! Glad you liked it. Thank you!:)
@ Green Speck: True!:)
@ Valli: You're right! Thank you!:)
I find both of these chilling really. I seem to get a different message from them than some of the other readers. I read the words of desperation rather than hope. Nice writing, and thanks for participating in Poets United!
ReplyDeletethis is a yearning that seems endless... no matter how much one is reassured, it returns again and again.
ReplyDeleteWow! I feel the pain of this poem and the hope for rescue.
ReplyDeleteI can remember feelings like this, which you have captured well. One wants to assure the narrator: trust the unfolding - for all will be well.
ReplyDeletethe first haiku is powerful, requiring no more words to carry full impact. well done.
ReplyDeleteI agree we search for hope and help!
ReplyDeleteI love how well you shared your message! :D
Sometimes external rescue does not exist and inner strength must arise.
ReplyDelete@ Mary: Desperation is somehow common for a confused soul, trapped in an eddy of uncertainty, as it desperately yearns to come out of that phase...Thank you!:)
ReplyDelete@ Laura: Maybe you're right. One has to put effort to get out of this situation. But words of assurance bring some solace to some extent :)
@ Judy Roney: Glad you felt what I tried to portray. Thanks!:)
@ Sherry Blue Sky: Yes! Thank you!:)
@ Kim Nelson: Thank you!:)
ReplyDelete@ Ella: Thanks so much!:)
@ Susan: sometimes...Maybe you're right! Thanks:)
It captures a lot of what I'm feeling of late. TY! :-)
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ReplyDeletemixed feelings....I can so realte to the emotions in these lines. We all go through such moments when we are totally caught up and confused...!
ReplyDeleteUncertainty is the watch-word of the present.Nice.
ReplyDelete@ Gayu: True! Thanks:)
ReplyDelete@ Rudraprayaga: :) Thank you!:)